Catch Some Wide Eye

Everything but me


my wastebasket sputters and yawns
filled with anything and everything
that reminded me of you
the things with your smell
the things with your taste
things that looked like you
things you gave me
things that start with the same letter as you
things that come from the place you live
things that you liked
the things that sound like you
things that you touched
everything and anything you tainted is gone
everything but me

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3 thoughts on “Everything but me

  1. WOW, I love this!
    So sad though.

    I hope you are alright.

    HAPPY VALENTINE’S DAY!

    hugs
    shakira

  2. edgarastonehill on said:

    This poem has so many great things about it, I don’t know where to begin. But that won’t stop me from trying.

    1) First line is captivating. Like we’ve talked or hinted at before attaching an action to something it couldn’t belong to has the potential to make it interesting. It is possible to do it wrong, but the opening line is perfectly executed.

    2) In the middle of the list you break up the seriousness by adding that the narrator has thrown things with the same first letter as the lost love.

    3) Making sense of the title in the last few lines is an enviable skill. The poem isn’t a riddle, but there is a revealing at the end.

    4) Making the reader use deduction to realize that the narrator considers herself/himself tainted.

    Excellent work!

  3. sparrowsong on said:

    Wow. I really appreciate the in-depth analysis. Thank you! 🙂

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