did you watch the stars, my darling?
they are from a fairy sea
which whispers on the very verge
let’s go there and see!
a lovely poem , well done
I really liked the first four lines!
but i didn’t like the last line, I found it broke the flow and feeling/tone of the poem and I didn’t like the use of the homophone see…
Haha yes! I actually don’t like this poem, either. I wrote it when I was much younger but decided to put it here along with the others to record the differences in my writing. 🙂
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I am for an art that has the power to knock your socks off. I am for poetry that already has. Author, musician, educator, scatter brain. Proudly serving the global community since 1984.