you are a dark swirl
cosmic, delicate, powerful
braced on the pinions of modesty and love
who can question?
i am a small dot
bleeding, perfunctory, lumpy
scrawled in the journal of self-adherence
i abandon this
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very impressive comparison and contrasts, beautiful poem!
Keep it up!
wonderful -I love it!!
Many different emotions in this. Nicely done.
You’ll find mine here.
another great example of my favourite saying less is more, so much emotion in such a short piece, excellent idea that works really well
we always see more in others…but a period brings all things to close…
Clever and emotional—perhaps the best way to use punctuation in a poem.
great work! love the style.
Brilliant! Cynicism and humor tied in a bow– nicely done!
Thanks for sharing. I hope you will visit my sites:
Tim Keeton – A Writer’s Tale
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Clever witty piece of writing punctuated with humor and cynicism.
Nicely done in so few words,,,,,
came by through jingle today first time here
please visit and comment back to poets who were here,
thank you for the input!
short, precise but profound……….well said…….impressed…..!!!!
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I am for an art that has the power to knock your socks off. I am for poetry that already has. Author, musician, educator, scatter brain. Proudly serving the global community since 1984.