Catch Some Wide Eye

Brought to Your Conclusions


you exhale your words
and their smoke fills up my eyes
while their substance beats my eardrums
senseless- words

words you exhale
exhale their smoke
you fill up my eyes
beat me senseless
my substance
frail, like a poem

you exhale me

[Written for the Poetry Potluck]

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12 thoughts on “Brought to Your Conclusions

  1. sparrowsong on said:

    Thank you! πŸ™‚

  2. How cool! A perfect poem!

  3. you have outstanding talent,

    love the way your words speak and breathe so very much!

    A+++
    πŸ™‚

  4. Love the way you express the relationship.

  5. Thanks, Sparrowsong I enjoyed πŸ™‚
    Peace to you,
    Laz

  6. What a wonderful arrangement – so simple and yet so complex. I love your play on words and the effect it has in twisting the meaning so beautifully. Fabulous use of imagery.
    Thank you for sharing your talent!
    πŸ™‚

  7. sparrowsong on said:

    Aw, thank you everyone. πŸ˜€

  8. Aww..the last line:-)

  9. irisdeurmyer on said:

    Haunting and well written. Pain of heart comes through in a constructive way. Great ending!

    Iris at http://irisinbloom.wordpress.com

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